Here is the second part of my second chapter to my story legends what do you think? its still not odne thou?

Okay, well, first off, you are going to have to add way more details. Like tell more about how you got ready for the fight. I don't know what the first part say, but maybe before the fight attack there could be some sort of comment among your partners or something. make it more interesting and improve your grammar. like, don't say stuff like you guys and gonna and co worker and make the people more professional and humorous in a serious sort if way. those phrases don't really fit in with the setting at all whatsoever. Oh, and plus, sorry dude, but don't be so modern about it because that will make people wonder about your story if it ever gets published. anyway, it's pretty good so far, i guess, but it's really not my type of genre, but for people who like these kinds of stories it's okay. Hope this helps.